tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post1232177793953557591..comments2013-01-03T05:57:46.661-08:00Comments on SPEAKING: In MemoriumChristeene Alcosibahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12979858986676994220noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-35834234322809562582010-08-18T08:43:40.538-07:002010-08-18T08:43:40.538-07:00Great imagery and story telling. Loved it. The met...Great imagery and story telling. Loved it. The metaphor of a train and journeying away. We never want our loved ones to go. Thank you for posting. Lovely. GayBeachannyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-62132068420910442112010-08-18T08:46:33.865-07:002010-08-18T08:46:33.865-07:00Thanks so much! This poem means a lot to me, espec...Thanks so much! This poem means a lot to me, especially this week. Hopefully you have something up for One Shot Wed. that I can check out?ChristeeneFraserhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08289770459390341064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-9794165452331593202010-08-18T08:49:22.849-07:002010-08-18T08:49:22.849-07:00beautiful...the running behind the car is such a g...beautiful...the running behind the car is such a great metaphor...and love the end where the tone changes a bit as you describe the passengers and the train...glad you hooked up with oneshot this week! welcome...Brian Millerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-74003188942382534372010-08-18T09:30:16.439-07:002010-08-18T09:30:16.439-07:00This is lovely. I'm so glad you brought it to ...This is lovely. I'm so glad you brought it to One Shot for all of us to share.PattiKenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-52966206949961390842010-08-18T09:30:16.438-07:002010-08-18T09:30:16.438-07:00Excellent post! Best of the OSW I have read so far...Excellent post! Best of the OSW I have read so far this week. Strong images, real emotion and a great metaphor. Well done you!Steven Marty Granthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12025403178005766557noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-29659597320920752302010-08-18T09:48:43.281-07:002010-08-18T09:48:43.281-07:00The last stanza is so hopeful. What a great turn.A...The last stanza is so hopeful. What a great turn.<br><br>And you used the word vermillion. That makes me think of Hopkins. :)Marcus Goodyearhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07255781957722144278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-84773519566648838502010-08-18T12:13:10.365-07:002010-08-18T12:13:10.365-07:00Beautiful imagery. I love the idea of listening t...Beautiful imagery. I love the idea of listening to the tracks, but the part about running after the caboose was the most poignant.Ben Langhinrchshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16077213274836551992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-91753955492619968082010-08-18T14:20:05.113-07:002010-08-18T14:20:05.113-07:00The beginning stanza is striking: the idea of the ...The beginning stanza is striking: the idea of the earth swallowing life, parallels the process of mourning the death of a loved one. Thanks for joining us for One Shot Wenesday. cheers!dustushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-41983569687871885112010-08-18T20:37:35.229-07:002010-08-18T20:37:35.229-07:00I'm sorry for the loss of your father. The poe...I'm sorry for the loss of your father. <br><br>The poem just sings of loss and acceptance.TALONhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-85675040179693647632010-08-19T01:00:01.715-07:002010-08-19T01:00:01.715-07:00this was absolutely beautiful..a fantastic poem ye...this was absolutely beautiful..a fantastic poem yet so very personal and sad...i think the comments above are ones you should be proud of..thanks for sharing with One shot..petePete Marshallhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-79319148171759314542010-08-19T06:20:10.528-07:002010-08-19T06:20:10.528-07:00Thanks everyone for such a warm reception, I'v...Thanks everyone for such a warm reception, I've never posted any of my poems online before. Looking forward to next Wednesday!ChristeeneFraserhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08289770459390341064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2897098273509121626.post-17101318049697780902010-08-19T08:58:54.099-07:002010-08-19T08:58:54.099-07:00this especially... "sometimes I lean my ears ...this especially... "sometimes I lean my ears to the rails"<br><br>oh, the distant tremble of memory colliding with present longingL.L. Barkathttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13333960142447144678noreply@blogger.com